Task Achievement
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion. However, the development of ideas could be more thorough, with more supporting evidence.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety and sophistication. Some phrases are repetitive, and there is limited use of high-band vocabulary.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical structure, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother. The conclusion summarizes the main points but lacks a strong final thought.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good command of grammar with mostly accurate sentence structures. However, there are some minor errors and a lack of complex sentence structures.