Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting both advantages and disadvantages. However, the discussion of disadvantages could be more developed.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate but lacks variety and sophistication. Some phrases are repetitive, and there are minor inaccuracies.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical flow of ideas. However, some transitions between points could be smoother, and the conclusion could better summarize the main arguments.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a basic command of grammar, but there are several errors in punctuation and sentence structure that affect clarity.