Task Achievement
The essay effectively addresses the task, presenting a clear position and supporting it with relevant arguments and examples. The conclusion reinforces the main points well.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, with some high-band words. However, there are instances of repetition and a lack of idiomatic expressions.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph builds on the previous one, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, including complex sentences. However, there are minor errors in punctuation and sentence structure that affect clarity.