Task Achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the task effectively, providing causes and solutions. However, some points could be developed further.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but there are instances of repetition and a lack of high-band vocabulary.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Ideas are logically sequenced, but some transitions could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are minor errors and some sentences lack complexity.