Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both government and individual responsibilities. However, the development of ideas could be more thorough, and some points lack supporting evidence.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety and sophistication. There are instances of repetition and some inaccuracies in word choice.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, some ideas are not logically sequenced, and transitions between sentences could be improved for better flow.
Grammatical Range
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. There is limited use of complex sentences.