Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear opinion. However, the arguments could be developed further with more examples and evidence.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are instances of incorrect word forms and collocations.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks effective transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Some sentences are convoluted, which affects the overall flow.
Grammatical Range
There are several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and sentence structures. The range of sentence types is limited.