Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear argument with supporting points. However, it could benefit from more detailed examples.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate but lacks variety and sophistication in some areas. There are instances of repetition.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical structure, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good command of grammar with a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are minor errors.