Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both views and providing a personal opinion. However, some arguments could be more developed with specific examples.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety and sophistication. There are instances of repetition and some inaccuracies in word choice.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument and structure, but some ideas could be better linked for improved flow. The use of cohesive devices is present but not always effective.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in punctuation and sentence complexity that affect clarity.