Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task and presents arguments for both sides, but the conclusion lacks a strong summary of the main points and could be more decisive.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, but there are instances of awkward phrasing and repetition. Some word choices are not precise.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, some ideas are not logically sequenced, and transitions between points could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are grammatical errors and awkward constructions that hinder clarity.