Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear opinion and supporting arguments. However, it could benefit from more specific examples.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but there are instances of repetition and some inaccuracies.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument with a logical flow of ideas. However, some transitions between points could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors in punctuation and sentence complexity.