Task Achievement
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas could be more thorough.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, but there are instances of repetition and some inaccuracies in word choice.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both views, and a conclusion. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a basic range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in punctuation and some sentences lack complexity.