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TOPIC Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects Other people think that in today s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.1

TOPIC Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects Other people think that in today s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History 1
It is argued by many that online shopping is skyrocketing and some day those shops in towns and cities will be closed because of it. I totally agree with this opinion and in this essay I will state the reasons of my view. The most compelling reason that is holding on to my view is the internet accessibility. Nowadays, almost all of the people are able to access the internet globally. This leads people to start their business online as they do not need to invest much. For example, to open the online store, a starter step will be to create a website or a Facebook page providing the product information which is for sale. A further reason for my view is the convenience of shopping online. Due to global business demands, people have to contribute more of their time into their work, hence they do not have much free time to go for shopping. When the online shopping becomes popular, people find it easier to shop online because just in one click or browse, they can get what they want. There is no time restriction that they could even do the shopping in their beds as well. A final reason to support my position is that online shopping provides information on products at one glance, such as sizes, colour and stock availability are displayed hence there is no need to seek for sale assistance. In conclusion, I totally agree that in future local shop owners will face to close their shops if the online shopping continues. This is because people can shop online as long as they have an internet connection and it provides convenience and all sorts of information in single look. Given this situation, this is recommended that local store owners should find a way to survive in the long run.
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is skyrocketing and
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in towns and cities will
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agree
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The most compelling
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reason
that is
holding on to my view is the internet accessibility. Nowadays, almost
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all of the
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are able to access the internet globally.
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as they do not need to invest much.
For example
, to open the
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online
store, a starter step will be to create a website or a Facebook page providing the product information which is for sale.

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further
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reason
for my view is the convenience of
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shopping
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online
. Due to global business demands,
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people
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have to
contribute more of their time into their work,
hence
they do not have much free time to go for
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shopping
. When the
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online
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becomes popular,
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people
find it easier to
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shop
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in one click or browse, they can
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get
what they want. There is no time restriction that they could even do the
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in their beds
as well
.

A final
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reason
to support my position is that
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online
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shopping
provides information on products at one glance, such as sizes,
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colour
and stock availability
are displayed
hence
there is no need to seek for sale assistance.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
that in future local
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shop
owners will face to close their
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shops
if the
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online
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shopping
continues. This is
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because
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people
can
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online
as long as they have an internet connection and it provides convenience and all sorts of information in single look.

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Given
this situation, this
is recommended
that local store owners should find a way to survive in the long run.
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IELTS essay TOPIC Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects Other people think that in today s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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