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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now ans plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now ans plans for its development.
The effective way to study is always the concern of all educational specialists in all nations across the globe. While it is believed that studying in groups is a rational way, I advocate that studying by ourselves is also of great importance. There are some sound reasons why cooperation in study has some positive effects on students. The first reason is that it facilitates the support from others. For example, practicing speaking means that we desire to use foreign languages in conversations, which means that a partner is necessary for face-to-face interaction and recognition of mistakes in lexical items and grammar. Other than that, if students work together, their workload can be relieved. The reason is that they can deliver their workload based on the strength of each member in a group with a view to enhancing performance and productivity. On the other hand, students can reap great benefits from studying alone for some compelling explanations. First of all, it helps them to avoid being disrupted by others and heighten their concentration. This is because the noise can be considered as a massive distraction and chatting with others can be attributed to working with a lot of people surrounding, which is time-consuming activities and sometime a culprit behind late submissions. Moreover, studying on our own provides us with more chances to gain thorough insight into some issues they have no idea about. When students work with the lack of peer support, they have to implement all possible methods, including optimizing the use of the Internet to search for information, reading reference book or even asking experience from senior students and tutors for the sake of answers for their questions. This not only widens their horizons, but also sharpens their personal skills. All in all, both studying collaboratively and studying alone accelerate the improvement of students’ learning outcomes.
The effective way to study is always the concern of all educational specialists in all nations across the globe. While it
is believed
that
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studying
in groups is a rational way, I advocate that
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studying
by ourselves is
also
of great importance.

There are
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some
sound reasons why cooperation in study has
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some
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positive
effects on
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students
. The
first
reason is that it facilitates the support from others.
For example
, practicing speaking means that we desire to
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use
foreign languages in conversations, which means that a partner is necessary for face-to-face interaction and recognition of mistakes in lexical items and grammar.
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Other
than that, if
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students
work together, their workload can
be relieved
. The reason is that they can deliver their workload based on the strength of each member in a group with a view to enhancing performance and productivity.

On the
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other
hand,
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students
can reap great benefits from
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studying
alone for
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some
compelling explanations.
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First of all
, it
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helps
them to avoid
being disrupted
by others and heighten their concentration. This is
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because
the noise can
be considered
as a massive distraction and chatting with others can
be attributed
to working with
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a lot of
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people
surrounding, which is time-consuming activities and sometime a culprit behind late submissions.
Moreover
,
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studying
on our
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own
provides us with more chances to gain thorough insight into
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some
issues they have no
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idea
about. When
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students
work with the lack of peer support, they
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have to
implement all possible methods, including optimizing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of the Internet to search for information, reading reference book or even asking experience from senior
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students
and tutors for the sake of answers for their questions. This not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
widens their horizons,
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but
also
sharpens their personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

All in all, both
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studying
collaboratively
and
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studying
alone accelerate the improvement of
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students’
learning outcomes.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now ans plans for its development.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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