Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task but does not fully develop the argument. Some points are underexplored, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main ideas.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and lacks variety. There are instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Some sentences are disjointed, making it difficult to follow the overall flow.
Grammatical Range
There are several grammatical errors, including punctuation mistakes and incorrect sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited.