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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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Overall Band Score: 6.5
Task Achievement
6.5
The essay addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, but the development of ideas could be more thorough. Some points lack sufficient support or examples.
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6
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, but there are instances of repetition and a lack of more sophisticated language. Some phrases could be more precise.
Coherence & Cohesion
6.5
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, some ideas could be better linked, and transitions between points could be smoother.
Grammatical Range
6
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in punctuation and sentence complexity that affect clarity.

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