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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps below illustrate the Islip town Centre now, and plans for future Islip town Centre. Overall, planned Islip town Centre will be developed by area, which will had a car park, bus station and new roads. At the beginning, current Centre of Islip have only one road, which names Main road. To the north and south of the Main road, we can see shops. To the north of the fist shop, we can see Countryside while to the south of the second shop, we can see two housings and to the south-east of the shop, we can look at the park. To the west of the second housing, we can detect the school. On the other hand, the planned development of Islip town Centre will be modernized by range. Main road will be demolished, and renamed to Pedestrians only. First shop will be modernized to four structures, which will be named like: Bus station, Shopping Centre, Car park and New housing. To the east of the housing will be erected new housing. Park will be become smaller while school will be made bigger.
The maps below illustrate the
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Islip
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town
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Centre
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now
, and plans for future
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Islip
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town
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Centre
.

Overall
, planned
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Islip
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town
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Centre
will
be developed
by area, which will had a car
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park
, bus station and new roads.

At the beginning,
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current
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Centre
of
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Islip
have
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only
one
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road
, which names Main
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road
. To the north and south of the Main
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road
, we can
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see
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shops
. To the north of the fist
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shop
, we can
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see
Countryside while to the south of the second
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shop
, we can
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see
two housings and to the south-east of the
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shop
, we can look at the
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park
.
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To
the west of the second housing, we can detect the school.

On the other hand
, the planned development of
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Islip
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town
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Centre
will
be modernized
by range. Main
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road
will
be demolished
, and renamed to Pedestrians
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only
.
First
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shop
will
be modernized
to four structures, which will
be named
like: Bus station, Shopping
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Centre
, Car
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park
and New housing. To the east of the housing will
be erected
new housing.
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Park
will
be become
smaller while school will
be made
bigger.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS essay The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
184 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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