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The chart below shows the percentage if households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The chart below shows the percentage if households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
In this day and age, an increasing number of factories are producing a glut of raw materials and goods which causes a detrimental effect on the environment. This essay will discuss that reducing consumption or usage of a polluting product and treatment of wastes, discharges and disposals of a pollutant are the viable solutions to this issue. The surplus production of merchandise in most of the industries is causing a harmful effect on the surroundings due to air and water pollution. The key to solving this problem is to avoid the intake and utilization of contaminating products such as cigarettes and plastics. For instance, many non-government organisations are conducting campaigns to ban the use of plastics in day to day life. Furthermore, people should use more renewable resources and discard the use of polluting products in daily lives. Another point to consider is that people should follow the correct way of discharging pollutants rather than throwing wastes in rivers and lakes. These products contain chemicals which the marine animals feed on by mistake. As a consequence, a glut of sea animals are dying every year due to this contamination of water. Moreover, some items are not bio-degradable, such as the plastic bottles, containers, plastic bags and food wrappers which pollute the water bodies. If the Government penalize industrial sector for disposing off wastes in the ocean, then the amount of water pollution can decrease. In conclusion, factory owners should reduce the manufacturing of contaminating products and the public should avoid the usage of such products.
In this day and age, an increasing number of factories are producing a glut of raw materials and
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goods
which causes a detrimental effect on the environment. This essay will discuss that reducing consumption or usage of a polluting
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product
and treatment of wastes, discharges and disposals of a pollutant are the viable solutions to this issue.

The surplus production of merchandise in most of the industries is causing a harmful effect on the surroundings due to air and
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water
pollution. The key to solving this problem is to avoid the intake and utilization of contaminating
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products
such as cigarettes and
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plastics
.
For instance
,
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many
non-
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government
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organisations
are conducting campaigns to ban the
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use
of
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plastics
in day to day life.
Furthermore
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people
should
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use
more renewable resources and discard the
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use
of polluting
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products
in daily
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lives
.

Another point to consider is that
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people
should follow the correct way of discharging pollutants
rather
than throwing wastes in rivers and lakes. These
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products
contain chemicals which the marine animals feed on by mistake. As a consequence, a glut of sea animals are dying every year due to this contamination of
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water
.
Moreover
,
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some
items are not bio-degradable, such as the
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plastic
bottles, containers,
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plastic
bags and food wrappers which pollute the
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water
bodies. If the
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Government
penalize industrial sector for disposing off wastes in the ocean, then the amount of
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water
pollution can decrease.

In conclusion
, factory owners should
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reduce
the manufacturing of contaminating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
and the public should avoid the usage of such
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products
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay The chart below shows the percentage if households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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