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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. v.3

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. v. 3
The chart illustrates rank number 1 to 10 of countries which produced and consumed the electricity in 2014. In order, those top ten nations are China, United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea. The electricity production in China as the first place reached 5. 398 billion KWH then it is followed by the slightly under amount of consumption. The similar pattern of under 100 billion KWH gap between the produced and the consumed electricity among these nations were applied for Russia, Japan, Brazil, and Korea during this period. On the other hand, some other countries such as United States, India, Canada, and France showed significant different amount between how much they produced and used electricity for over 100 billion KWH. Meanwhile, the usage of electricity in Germany was 582, 5 billion KWH. Whereas, the production was only 526. 6 billion KWH which means that Germany still had lack of electricity production.
The chart illustrates rank number 1 to 10 of countries which produced and consumed the
electricity
in 2014. In order, those top ten nations are China, United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea.

The
electricity
production in China as the
first
place reached 5. 398
billion
KWH then it
is followed
by the
slightly
under amount of consumption. The similar pattern of under 100
billion
KWH gap between the produced and the consumed
electricity
among these nations
were applied
for Russia, Japan, Brazil, and Korea during this period.

On the other hand
,
some
other countries such
as United States
, India, Canada, and France
showed
significant
different
amount between how much they produced and
used
electricity
for over 100
billion
KWH.

Meanwhile, the usage of
electricity
in Germany was 582, 5
billion
KWH.
Whereas
, the production was
only
526. 6
billion
KWH which means that Germany
still
had lack of
electricity
production.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. v. 3

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