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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school. v.36

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school. v. 36
Different individuals have their own opinion about the type of schools for the young people. Some believe that having a single-sex educational institution benefits the student's professional development while others believe that they should be taught in co-educational schools. In this essay, both the viewpoints will be critiqued before reaching the reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, there are the groups of people who consider that the girls and the boys should learn in mixed sex schools. The main reason for this belief is that these schools are the representatives of the real life in which men and women have to stay together. In other words, these institutions concentrate on developing children's social skills for the better adult life. Thus, it is apparent that the students getting qualified from such schools can easily adjust in the actual world, resulting in a peaceful life. On the other hand, some individuals feel that the pupils passed out of the single-sex schools have greater chances of a successful career. They believe this because according to them studying with the same gender reduces the distractions and helps them to concentrate more on studies. Furthermore, the boys and the girls may have different needs and ways of learning which can be satisfied in the schools with same-sex students. Therefore, the theory that such learners progress more in their profession is difficult to debunk. In conclusion, although these students have a prosperous work life, they can lack the social skills. Hence, it is proved that people should prefer admitting their kids in the mixed sex schools for their personal as well as professional growth. It is expected that the government will try to increase the number of such schools in the country.
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individuals have their
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own
opinion about the type of
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schools
for the young
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people
.
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Some
believe that having a single-sex educational institution benefits the student's professional development while others believe that they should
be taught
in co-educational
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schools
. In this essay, both the viewpoints will
be critiqued
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before
reaching the reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand, there are the groups of
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people
who consider that the girls and the boys should learn in mixed sex
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schools
. The main reason for this belief is that these
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schools
are the representatives of the real life in which
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men
and women
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have to
stay together.
In other words
, these institutions concentrate on developing children's social
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skills
for the better adult life.
Thus
, it is apparent that the students getting qualified from such
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schools
can
easily
adjust in the actual world, resulting in a peaceful life.

On the other hand
,
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some
individuals feel that the pupils passed out of the single-sex
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schools
have greater chances of a successful career. They believe this
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because
according to them studying with the same gender
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reduces
the distractions and
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helps
them to concentrate more on studies.
Furthermore
, the boys and the girls may have
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different
needs and ways of learning which can
be satisfied
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
with same-sex students.
Therefore
, the theory that such learners progress more in their profession is difficult to debunk.

In conclusion
, although these students have a prosperous work life, they can lack the social
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skills
.
Hence
, it
is proved
that
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people
should prefer admitting their kids in the mixed sex
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schools
for their personal
as well
as professional growth. It is
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expected
that the
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government
will try to increase the number of such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
in the country.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school. v. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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