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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.30

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 30
It is thought by some people that boys and girls should learn separately in school, while others consider mixed schools to be more beneficial. Although single-sex schools have some benefits, I believe that attending a mixed school is better for any young person. On the one hand, some believe that single-gender schools are better for young people. Firstly, they might be more comfortable for some teenagers, especially shy ones who find it hard to learn alongside the opposite sex. As a result, learning becomes easier and more efficient since students can focus on their studies instead of being self-conscious in front of the other gender. Secondly, teenagers usually engage in early relationships with the other sex so separating them would solve this problem. However, it is unrealistic to separate boys and girls at school because separation leads to avoidance and misunderstandings when they grow up. On the other hand, some people argue that young people should attend mixed schools, and I agree. Boys and girls must learn how to deal with each other in life and, therefore, separating them in schools can be detrimental to their personal development. Mixed schools allow them to develop an understanding for each other and enhances their teamwork skills, which is a crucial skill for adults in the workplace. For instance, a girl who studied at a mixed school can easily communicate with her male colleagues at work without being shy or reluctant. Another point is that mixed schools foster harmony between boys and girls by allowing them to recognize and respect their differences and, consequently, treat each other equally. In conclusion, while people have varying perspectives, I consider mixed schools to be more beneficial to young people as they can teach them valuable life skills.
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and enhances their teamwork
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for adults in the workplace.
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can
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communicate with her male colleagues at work without being shy or reluctant. Another point is that
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mixed
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foster harmony between
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and
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by allowing them to recognize and respect their differences and,
consequently
, treat each
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equally
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have varying perspectives, I consider
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to be more beneficial to
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as they can teach them valuable life
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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