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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.29

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 29
Opinions are split among many when it comes to whether boys and girls get benefits from being taught together or not. Many people prefer single-gender schools, while others argue that mixed schools bring more benefits. However, I incline to view that co-educational schools are the way forward. Advocates of single-sex schools believe that boys and girls have different attitudes towards learning and teachers can employ particular techniques designed specially to match the gender. For instance, studies reveal that boys learn better when classroom temperature is cool, while girls perform better in warm classrooms. So, the temperature in a single-gender classroom could be set to suit the different needs of male or female students. In addition, when students are not distracted by their opposite sex, they often find it easier to focus on academics. This means that students participate actively in the classes where everybody is the same sex. On the other hand, the proponents of mixed schools argue that co-ed schools prepare their students better for the future career. That is to say that when boys and girls are taught in the classroom, they can develop teamwork skill with the opposite sex. This is an opportunity that completely lacks in single-gender classrooms. This opportunity is of paramount importance because it mirrors the real world. Moreover, mixed schools provide the chance to understand and communicate with the opposite sex. Boys and girls have different perspectives and in a mixed school, they manage to learn from each other. In conclusion, the prime objective of education is to prepare students for the future life. In co-educational schools, girls and boys learn from each other and can see the world in a different light from different perspectives. Mixed schools, thus, inculcate certain values and principles that are useful for their future.
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to whether
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girls
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get
benefits from
being taught
together or not.
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people
prefer single-gender
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schools
, while others argue that
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mixed
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schools
bring more benefits.
However
, I incline to view that co-educational
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schools
are the way forward.

Advocates of single-sex
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schools
believe that
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boys
and
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girls
have
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different
attitudes towards learning and teachers can employ particular techniques designed
specially
to match the gender.
For instance
, studies reveal that
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boys
learn better when classroom temperature is cool, while
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girls
perform better in warm classrooms.
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So
, the temperature in a single-gender classroom could
be set
to suit the
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different
needs of male or female
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students
.
In addition
, when
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students
are not distracted by their opposite sex, they
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often
find it easier to focus on academics. This means that
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students
participate
actively
in the classes where everybody is the same sex.

On the other hand
, the proponents of
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mixed
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schools
argue that co-ed
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schools
prepare their
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students
better for the future career.
That is
to say that when
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boys
and
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girls
are taught
in the classroom, they can develop teamwork
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skill
with the opposite sex. This is an opportunity that completely lacks in single-gender classrooms. This opportunity is of paramount importance
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because
it mirrors the real world.
Moreover
,
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mixed
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schools
provide the chance to understand and communicate with the opposite sex.
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Boys
and
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girls
have
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different
perspectives and in a
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mixed
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school
, they manage to learn from each other.

In conclusion
, the prime objective of education is to prepare
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students
for the future life. In co-educational
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schools
,
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girls
and
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boys
learn from each other and can
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see
the world in a
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different
light from
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different
perspectives.
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Mixed
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schools
,
thus
, inculcate certain values and principles that are useful for their future.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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    Present relevant ideas
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