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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.25

Many people think that co-education of girls and boys is better than single sex education system. But both the argument have there own gravity so thorough study is needed before arriving to a logical conclusion. One the one hand, some who believe education must given to boys and girls separately, they can enjoy complete freedom in schools, to be precise, they can wear whatever they want. Another reason is that, the student becomes self sufficient, that is they don't need the support of the opposite sex for their survival. On the other hand, mixed school students have much more ability to interact in modern society and they are capable of facing different situations, for example, if an accident occurs to the opposite sex, they suddenly reacts to it. Another point is that they value about equality, to be clearer, without having any gender inequality they are participating in each and every activities in the school, that eventually make benefits in their future life. To conclude, both views has waitages but co-education system is more advanced in the modern society.

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think
 that co-education of girls and boys is better than single sex education system. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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 thorough study is needed
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before
 arriving to a logical conclusion.

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One
 the one hand, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 who believe education This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
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 to boys and girls separately
, they can enjoy complete freedom in schools, to be precise, they can wear whatever they want. Another reason is that, the student becomes This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.self-sufficient
self sufficient
, that is
 they don't need the support of the opposite sex for their survival.

On the other hand
, mixed school students have much more ability to interact in modern Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).society, and
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 they are capable of facing This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
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 situations, for example
, if an accident occurs to the opposite sex, they suddenly
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reacts
 to it. Another point is that they value about equality, to be clearer, without having any gender inequality they are participating in each and every The noun should probably be in the singular form: “activity”?activity
activities
 in the school, that eventually
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 benefits in their future life.

To conclude
, both views has Possible spelling mistake found.wait ages
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but
 co-education system is more advanced in the modern society. 