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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.24

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 24
Although many believe that educating girls and boys in the same schools is beneficial, others, including me think that separate schooling is a better option. Mixed schooling at times creates embarrassments whereas attending separate schools improves confidence in answering questions. On the one hand, mixed schooling is said to be effective for both genders because they pretend to behave well in front of opposite genders and learn lessons in advance just to show off their talents. For example, In India many schools are co-ed, both girls and boys prepare their lessons beforehand to be able to answer questions asked by teachers, so to create a good impression in front of other gender. Additionally, they participate in sports to win and get girls attention and therefore behaviour is noticed to be well mannered in the classroom. Thus mixed schools have only attention seeker impact on each other and not suited for the actual learning process. On the other hand, separate schooling develops confidence while answering questions asked by school teachers. As, they do not have to fear for facing embarrassments in front of the opposite gender if the answers go wrong. They confidently ask questions if not understood and they seem to feel more comfortable in asking more clarity on unclear subject. For instance, Science practical on physiology and anatomy conducted in mixed gender schools in learning function of body parts could create embarrassments and questions are not asked to clarify detailed information on it. Thus, separate schooling is more effective in educating girls and boys. In conclusion, co-ed schools are thought to be effective it, however, could put students in awkward situation at times. In my opinion, gender-specific schooling is indeed very beneficial for girls and boys as discussed above.
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many
believe that educating
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girls
and boys in the same
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schools
is beneficial, others, including me
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think
that
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separate
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schooling
is a better option.
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Mixed
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schooling
at times creates embarrassments whereas attending
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separate
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schools
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improves
confidence in answering questions.

On the one hand,
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mixed
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schooling
is said
to be effective for both genders
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because
they pretend to behave well in front of opposite genders and learn lessons in advance
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just
to
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show
off their talents.
For example
, In India
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many
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schools
are co-ed, both
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girls
and boys prepare their lessons beforehand to be able to answer
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questions
asked by teachers,
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so
to create a
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good
impression in front of
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other
gender.
Additionally
, they participate in sports to win and
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get
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girls
attention and
therefore
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behaviour
is noticed
to be
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well mannered
in the classroom.
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mixed
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schools
have
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only
attention seeker impact on each
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other
and not suited for the actual learning process.

On the
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other
hand,
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separate
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schooling
develops confidence while answering
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questions
asked by
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school
teachers. As, they do not
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have to
fear for facing embarrassments in front of the opposite gender if the answers go
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wrong
. They
confidently
ask
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questions
if not
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understood and
they seem to feel more comfortable in asking more clarity on unclear subject.
For instance
, Science practical on physiology and anatomy conducted in
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mixed
gender
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schools
in learning function of body parts could create embarrassments and
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questions
are not asked to clarify detailed information on it.
Thus
,
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separate
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schooling
is more effective in educating
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girls
and boys.

In conclusion
, co-ed
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schools
are
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thought
to be effective it,
however
, could put students in awkward situation at times. In my opinion, gender-specific
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schooling
is
indeed
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very
beneficial for
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girls
and boys as discussed above.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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