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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.13

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more attending mixed schools. v. 13
CERTAIN PEOPLE ARE OF THE OPINION THAT IT IS PREFERABLE TO TEACH BOYS AND GIRLS IN DIFFERENT INSTITUTIONS. WHILE, SOME THINK THAT BOTH GENDERS PROFIT FROM GOING TO THE SAME SCHOOL. THE ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE MY OPINION WHICH STATES THAT MIXED SCHOOLS ARE BETTER BECAUSE IT PREPARES THE KID FOR A SIMILAR ADULT LIFE. TO START WITH, SOME INDIVIDUALS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER TO EDUCATE MALE AND FEMALE CHILDREN IN SEPARATE SCHOOLS. YET OTHERS, OPINE THAT BOTH GENDERS BENEFIT MORE FROM STUDYING IN THE SAME ACADEMY. IT IS SAID THAT SINGLE SEXED SCHOOLS IMPROVE AND PROMOTE A MORE RELAXED ENVIRONMENT. IN THE SENSE THAT CHIDREN ARE AT A STAGE OF SELF-DISCOVERY OR IN SOME CASES PUBERTY, WHEN THEY ARE WITH OTHERS OF SIMILAR PHYSICAL ATTRIBUTES THEY CAN LEARN ABOUT THE CHANGES FROM THEIR PEERS AND EMBRACE IT EXPEDITIOUSLY. IT CAN BE OBSERVED THAT THE AFFOREMENTIONED INCREASES THEIR SELF CONFIDENCE. TO ILLUSTRATE, DURING A RESEARCH, A GROUP OF PRE PUBESCENT GIRLS ONCE SAID THAT THEY USED TO HEAR ABOUT MENSTRUATION ALOT FROM THEIR TUTORS BUT THEY NEVER FULLY KNEW THE IMPLICATION, TILL THEY SAW THEIR FRIENDS GO THROUGH IT. ON THE BASIS OF THAT, A NUMBER OF PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS BEST TO TUTOR MALE AND FEMALE CHILDREN APART. CONVERSELY, SOME PERSONS ARE OF THE VIEWPOINT THAT IT IS FAVOURABLE TO EDUCATE THE BOY AND A GIRL CHILD APART, IN SPITE OF THAT, OTHERS ARE OF THE THOUGHT THAT IT IS MORE BENEFITIAL FOR THE MALE AND FEMALE CHILD TO ATTEND SAME-SEX SCHOOLS. ADMITTEDLY, SINGLE SEXED SCHOOL IS UNNECESSARY AND VERY UNHEALTHY IN TERMS OF CHILDRENS SOCIAL DEVELOPMENT. AN INFANT ONLY SOCIALIZES WITH PEOPLE OF THE SAME GENDER AND HAS LITTLE OR NO EXPERIENCE WITH THE OTHER GENDER. ALTERNATIVELY, IT IS INTERESTING TO NOTE THAT MIXED SCHOOLS PORTRAY A BASIC REPRESENTATION OF REAL LIFE, BECAUSE IT PROVIDES ONE WITH A BETTER PICTURE OF THE DAY TO DAY HAPPENINGS IN THE SOCIETY, WHERE MALE AND FEMALE INTERACT AND CO-EXIST EFFICIENTLY. ON TOP OF THAT, EQUIPPING THEM WITH UTMOST SOCIAL SKILLS. ONE PARTICUALARLY GOOD ILLUSTRATION, WAS A SURVEY CARRIED OUT IN BRITAIN 1980 SHOWED THAT 90% OF THE CHILDREN THAT WENT TO MIXED SCHOOLS HAD A HEALTHY SOCIAL LIFE AND ONLY 15% OF THOSE THAT WENT TO SINGLE SEXED SCHOOLHOUSE COUD BOAST OF THE SAME. FOR THE INDICATED REASON, I AM OF THE VIEW THAT MIXED SCHOOLS ARE VERY ESSENTIAL. TO CONCLUDE, DESPITE THE FACT THAT SOME ARE OF THE BELIEVE THAT IT IS FAVOURABLE TO TUTOR BOYS AND GIRLS IN SEPARATE INSTITUTES FOR THE REASON THAT IT PROMOTES PHYSICAL-SELF LEARNING. OTHERS, ARE OF THE PERSPECTIVE THAT DIFFERENT GENDERS WOULD BENEFIT FROM SAME SCHOOL. THE ESSAY HAS DISCUSSED BOTH AREAS AND PROFFERED MY OPINION.
CERTAIN
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PEOPLE
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GIRLS
IN
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DIFFERENT
INSTITUTIONS. WHILE,
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SOME
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THINK
THAT BOTH GENDERS PROFIT FROM GOING TO THE SAME
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SCHOOL
. THE ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE MY OPINION WHICH STATES THAT
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MIXED
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SCHOOLS
ARE BETTER
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BECAUSE
IT PREPARES THE KID FOR A SIMILAR ADULT LIFE.

TO
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START
WITH,
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SOME
INDIVIDUALS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER TO EDUCATE MALE AND
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FEMALE
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CHILDREN
IN SEPARATE
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SCHOOLS
.
YET
OTHERS, OPINE THAT BOTH GENDERS BENEFIT MORE FROM STUDYING IN THE SAME ACADEMY. IT
IS SAID
THAT SINGLE SEXED
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SCHOOLS
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IMPROVE
AND PROMOTE A MORE RELAXED ENVIRONMENT. IN THE SENSE THAT
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CHIDREN
ARE AT A STAGE OF SELF-DISCOVERY OR IN
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SOME
CASES PUBERTY, WHEN THEY ARE WITH OTHERS OF SIMILAR PHYSICAL ATTRIBUTES THEY CAN LEARN ABOUT THE
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CHANGES
FROM THEIR PEERS AND EMBRACE IT
EXPEDITIOUSLY
. IT CAN
BE OBSERVED
THAT THE
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AFFOREMENTIONED
INCREASES THEIR SELF CONFIDENCE. TO ILLUSTRATE, DURING A RESEARCH, A GROUP OF PRE PUBESCENT
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GIRLS
ONCE SAID THAT THEY
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USED
TO HEAR ABOUT MENSTRUATION
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ALOT
FROM THEIR TUTORS
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BUT
THEY NEVER
FULLY
KNEW THE IMPLICATION, TILL THEY
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SAW
THEIR FRIENDS GO THROUGH IT.

ON THE BASIS OF THAT, A NUMBER OF
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PEOPLE
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THINK
THAT IT IS BEST TO TUTOR MALE AND
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FEMALE
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CHILDREN
APART.

CONVERSELY
,
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SOME
PERSONS ARE OF THE VIEWPOINT THAT IT IS
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FAVOURABLE
TO EDUCATE THE BOY AND A
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GIRL
CHILD APART,
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IN SPITE OF
THAT, OTHERS ARE OF THE
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THOUGHT
THAT IT IS MORE
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BENEFITIAL
FOR THE MALE AND
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FEMALE
CHILD TO ATTEND SAME-SEX
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SCHOOLS
.
ADMITTEDLY
, SINGLE SEXED
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SCHOOL
IS UNNECESSARY AND
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VERY
UNHEALTHY IN TERMS OF
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CHILDRENS
SOCIAL DEVELOPMENT. AN INFANT
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ONLY
SOCIALIZES WITH
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PEOPLE
OF THE SAME GENDER AND HAS
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LITTLE
OR NO EXPERIENCE WITH THE
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OTHER
GENDER.
ALTERNATIVELY
, IT IS INTERESTING TO NOTE THAT
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MIXED
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SCHOOLS
PORTRAY A BASIC REPRESENTATION OF REAL LIFE,
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BECAUSE
IT PROVIDES ONE WITH A BETTER PICTURE OF THE
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DAY TO DAY
HAPPENINGS IN THE SOCIETY, WHERE MALE AND
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FEMALE
INTERACT AND CO-EXIST
EFFICIENTLY
.
ON TOP OF THAT
, EQUIPPING THEM WITH UTMOST SOCIAL
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SKILLS
. ONE
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PARTICUALARLY
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ILLUSTRATION, WAS A SURVEY CARRIED OUT IN BRITAIN 1980
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SHOWED
THAT 90% OF THE
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CHILDREN
THAT WENT TO
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MIXED
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SCHOOLS
HAD A HEALTHY SOCIAL LIFE AND
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ONLY
15% OF THOSE THAT WENT TO SINGLE SEXED SCHOOLHOUSE
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COUD
BOAST OF THE SAME.

FOR THE INDICATED REASON, I AM OF THE VIEW THAT
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MIXED
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SCHOOLS
ARE
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VERY
ESSENTIAL.

TO CONCLUDE
, DESPITE THE FACT THAT
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SOME
ARE OF THE
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BELIEVE
THAT IT IS
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FAVOURABLE
TO TUTOR BOYS AND
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GIRLS
IN SEPARATE INSTITUTES FOR THE REASON THAT IT PROMOTES PHYSICAL-SELF LEARNING. OTHERS, ARE OF THE PERSPECTIVE THAT
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DIFFERENT
GENDERS WOULD BENEFIT FROM SAME
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SCHOOL
. THE ESSAY HAS DISCUSSED BOTH AREAS AND PROFFERED MY OPINION.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more attending mixed schools. v. 13

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
457 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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