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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 1
We know that education system plays a crucial role in shaping the future of our children. Many people believe that children should study in gender-specific schools whereas some argue that co-educational schools bring more benefit. This essay will discuss both sides and give my own opinion. There are several positive aspects to teaching children / students in mixed schools. One of them is that boys and girls learn about how to respect each other. These schools help them to understand that both genders have equal rights and positions in society. For example, mixed education systems conduct a lot of extra-curricular activities to prove that boys and girls have the same potential to accomplish tasks. Another reason is that co-ed schools educate boys and girls to work in diversification. These schools educate how to understand a different gender in terms of biological factors, emotions and behaviors. Overall, mixed schools allow boys and girls to understand and respect each other in a society. On the other hand, same sex schools have their own merits. These schools can spend time in educating one gender with more focus and can also teach students with new methodologies based on the gender. For instance, a research from Oxford University shows that girls perform better in mathematics if they get lessons through real- life situations. Another benefit is that teachers do not hesitate to discuss the gender specific topic while teaching. To illustrate, I remember that reproduction cycle chapter from my school days. My biology instructor had to take a separate class for boys as she was embarrassed to discuss the topic in the class of mixed students. Therefore, same sex schools open a channel for teachers to widen their teaching skills and give liberty to discuss the study materials. In conclusion, both types of schools have their own merits. I personally feel that co-ed schools are more beneficial because they enable boys and girls to work together in different areas of education. This helps them to grow in their future profession or careers.
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believe that children should study in gender-specific
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whereas
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some
argue that co-educational
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schools
bring more benefit. This essay will
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both sides and give my
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own
opinion.

There are several
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positive
aspects to teaching children / students in
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mixed
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schools
. One of them is that
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boys
and
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girls
learn about how to respect each other. These
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schools
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help
them to understand that both genders have equal rights and positions in society.
For example
,
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mixed
education systems conduct
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a lot of
extra-curricular activities to prove that
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boys
and
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girls
have the same potential to accomplish tasks. Another reason is that co-ed
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schools
educate
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boys
and
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girls
to work in diversification. These
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schools
educate how to understand a
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different
gender in terms of biological factors, emotions and behaviors.
Overall
,
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mixed
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schools
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allow
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boys
and
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to understand and respect each other in a society.

On the other hand
, same sex
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schools
have their
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own
merits. These
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schools
can spend time in educating one gender with more focus and can
also
teach students with new methodologies based on the gender.
For instance
,
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a research
from Oxford University
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shows
that
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girls
perform
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better in mathematics
if they
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get
lessons through real- life situations. Another benefit is that teachers do not hesitate to
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discuss
the
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gender specific
topic while teaching. To illustrate, I remember that reproduction cycle chapter from my
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school
days. My biology instructor had to take a separate
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class
for
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boys
as she
was embarrassed
to
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discuss
the topic in the
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class
of
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mixed
students.
Therefore
, same sex
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schools
open a channel for teachers to widen their teaching
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skills
and give liberty to
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discuss
the study materials.

In conclusion
, both types of
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have their
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own
merits. I
personally
feel that co-ed
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schools
are more beneficial
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because
they enable
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boys
and
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girls
to work together in
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different
areas of education. This
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helps
them to grow in their future profession or careers.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
337 words
6.5
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