Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school. v. 1
Undoubtedly, nowadays the education of children is extremely serious. Some people consider that is better to teach boys and girls together, but others not believe this item. I agree with this the fact that tech boys and girls in school together. In turn, this essay will discuss the role of education of children together or apart in school. On the one hand, teaching of boys and girls in school together cause cooperation in issues and it is possible help to children in improving social relationships. Therefor it is must stronger boys and girls in return problems and difficulties so that it is great feels to them for life. One might argue that the rise of ability children. These schools educate how to understand a different gender in items biologic factors, emotions and behaviours. The overall mixed school allows to boys and girls to understand and respect each other in a society. On the other hand, there are schools where girls and boys are taught separately that might reduce their social connection, while it can cause them mental problems. Maybe In this school girl or boys can better indicate individual ability and leading to rise activities. Moreover, this school can spend more time in education one gender with more focus and can also tech students with a new method based on the gender. In conclusion, schools should create equal opportunities for boys and girls to make the best use of their talents and both view it can be great in some ways. This helps them to grow in their future profession or careers.
Undoubtedly
, nowadays the education of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
is
extremely
serious.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
consider
that is
better to teach
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
together,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
others not believe this item. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this the fact that tech
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
together. In turn, this essay will discuss the role of education of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
together or apart in school.

On the one hand, teaching of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
together cause cooperation in issues and it is possible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in improving social relationships. Therefor it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
stronger
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
in return problems and difficulties
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it is great feels to them for life. One might argue that the rise of ability
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
educate how to understand a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
gender in items biologic factors, emotions and
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviours' is British English.
behaviours
. The
overall
mixed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
to understand and respect each other in a society.

On the other hand
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
are taught
separately
that might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their social connection, while it can cause them mental problems. Maybe In this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girl
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
can better indicate individual ability and leading to rise activities.
Moreover
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
can spend more time in education one gender with more focus and can
also
tech students with a new method based on the gender.

In conclusion
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
should create equal opportunities for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boys
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the best
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of their talents and both view it can be great in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
ways. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to grow in their future profession or careers.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Some people think that is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts