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Some people say that History is one of the most important school subjects. Others think that, in today’s world, subject like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. v.3

Few individuals believe that history is amongst the most important subjects in school. While others are of the view that, subjects like science and technology are more important than history in today's world. I shall discuss both these views and give my opinion about the same. History, as a subject has great importance. However, I believe science and technology outweigh the merits of history. Firstly, history teaches students about the past wars which help humans to know about various division of kingdoms, cities and places. Additionally, history includes religion aspects from which people get awareness about their ancestrals and their experiences in past. Moreover, individuals can learn about the monuments that were built thousands of years ago, by different kings and also learn about the reasons behind the building of such monuments. On the other hand, science and technology helps humans to understand about various gadgets that can be built which will helps people in near future. For instance, science and technology is helping scientists to learn more about outer space, planets, and satellites. Additionally, it is helping them to build various gadgets which help individuals in their daily lives such as, cars, computers, mobile phones, and other electronics are blessings for today's generation and technology is improving such gadgets with even more advancements for future use. In my opinion, all subjects have their own importance in each individual lives. History has the advantage of letting people know about past. Whereas, science and technology helps an individual to understand about present and future. Similarly, other subjects like english, maths and social have their own significance. Thus, all the subjects should be taught with equal relevance in the schools.
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subjects
in school. While others are of the view that,
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are more
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in
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's world. I shall discuss both these views and give my opinion about the same.
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History
, as a
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subject
has great importance.
However
, I believe
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science
and
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technology
outweigh the merits of history.

Firstly
,
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history
teaches students about the past wars which
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help
humans to know about various division of kingdoms, cities and places.
Additionally
,
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history
includes religion aspects from which
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people
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get
awareness about their ancestrals and their experiences in past.
Moreover
,
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individuals
can learn about the monuments that
were built
thousands of years ago, by
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different
kings and
also
learn about the reasons behind the building of such monuments.

On the
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other
hand,
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science
and
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technology
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helps
humans to understand about various gadgets that can
be built
which will
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helps
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people
in near future.
For instance
,
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science
and
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technology
is helping scientists to learn more about outer space, planets, and satellites.
Additionally
, it is helping them to build various gadgets which
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help
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individuals
in their daily
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lives
such as, cars, computers, mobile phones, and
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other
electronics are blessings for
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today
's generation and
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technology
is improving such gadgets with even more advancements for future
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use
.

In my opinion, all
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subjects
have their
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own
importance in each
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individual
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lives
.
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History
has the advantage of letting
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people
know about past. Whereas,
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science
and
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technology
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helps
an
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individual
to understand about present and future.
Similarly
,
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other
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subjects
like english, maths and social have their
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own
significance.
Thus
, all the
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subjects
should
be taught
with equal relevance in the schools.
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IELTS essay Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history.

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4 paragraphs
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