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some people say history is one of the most important school subjects, other people think that in today's world; subject's like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these view and given your own opinion. v.1

some people say history is one of the most important school subjects, other people think that in today's world; subject's like science and technology are more important than history. v. 1
Some people believe that the most relevant subject is history, Others people think that science and technology would be more essential recently. I agree with this statement about the art and automation is very important then past. Because nowadays scope will be information and computer. First of all, I discuss about technology. Skill and machinery very benefits of student the help of job, and country will be making development because which rustic are developed that Arcadian ahead, of economics, financial ethics and respect all over the world because nowadays beyond the technique and mechanics. This is because of the ease created for people. This is the cause of people others people talking with, the help of phone and mobile. Nowadays everybody have to mobile. Mobile very easy way talking other people, whether a person abroad, then either talking with it. Because all of these it is possible main motive of high tech. Now, I discuss about the old days. Days of old are also important in education. Because antiquity since we are learning with lesson, in our Ogestic. And we should be bygone time learn to all over the world. This is the aim of interaction with other people. This is the cause of a country error, will be reaching him. Because errors will be the description with olden days. This for ancient time as well as important to skill and mechanization. In conclusion, Both are very important for education, and an Outland. Both are good benefits. Because which are good for the out-country. They do want. My opinion is that both are important for unrefined people.
Some
people
believe that the most relevant subject is history, Others
people
think
that science and technology would be more essential recently. I
agree
with this statement about the art and automation is
very
important
then past.
Because
nowadays scope will be information and computer.

First of all
, I
discuss about technology
.
Skill
and machinery
very
benefits of student the
help
of job, and country will be making development
because
which rustic
are developed
that Arcadian ahead, of economics, financial ethics and respect all over the world
because
nowadays beyond the technique and mechanics. This is
because
of the
ease
created for
people
. This is the cause of
people
others
people
talking with, the
help
of phone and mobile. Nowadays everybody
have
to mobile. Mobile
very
easy way talking
other
people
, whether a person abroad, then either talking with it.
Because
all of these it is possible main motive of high tech.

Now
, I
discuss about the
old
days. Days of
old
are
also
important
in education.
Because
antiquity since we are learning with lesson, in our
Ogestic
. And we should be bygone time learn to all over the world. This is the aim of interaction with
other
people
. This is the cause of a country error, will be reaching him.
Because
errors will be the description with olden days. This for ancient time
as well
as
important
to
skill
and mechanization.

In conclusion
, Both are
very
important
for education, and an
Outland
. Both are
good
benefits.
Because
which are
good
for the out-country. They do want. My opinion is that both are
important
for unrefined
people
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay some people say history is one of the most important school subjects, other people think that in today's world; subject's like science and technology are more important than history. v. 1

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