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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words. v.9

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. v. 9
Nowadays, science and technology rising their tend. It is generally believed that, history is very meaningful subjectin this era. I personally believe that now people follow modern feature, which is help them a lot, however it is seems that. In school all teachers are focuse on science and technology, even just forty-five above ages focus on history subjects. In this essay I will discuss my personal and academic view. in addition, modern teachers have main focus on science and technology, whereas student gives more attention in class. For instance, when I was in school I set my mind on science and technology, rather than in history class I usually slept because I did not take any interest in History subject. majority of student love modern subject such as computer, science, biology and etcetera. although, Science and Technology developing day by day, as a students Giving more attention in the class. on the other hand, History subject also play a very important role. Most of the teacher who are above forty ages, their main target is History subject, which is help a lot to the student in their life. They believe that, youth could make their life more easier with. For illustration, when Student start knowing about historical story like how in eighteen for nineteen century people did struggle youth would be obtain motivation from it, even they would never give up to their life those people who have motivated from old stories. In conclusion, does not matter what student ought to take subject. Its matter what student would like to learn about which subject, history or technology and science
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it is seems that. In school all teachers are
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focuse on
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and
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, even
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forty-five above ages focus on
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history
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. In this essay I will discuss my personal and academic view.

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addition, modern teachers have main focus on
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science
and
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technology
, whereas
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student
gives more attention in
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.
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, when I was in school I set my mind on
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and
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,
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than in
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history
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class
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usually
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because
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majority
of
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student
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modern
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such as computer,
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, biology and etcetera.
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although
,
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and
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developing day by day, as a
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students
Giving more attention in the
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the other hand,
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also
play a
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role. Most of the teacher who are above forty ages, their main target is
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History
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subject
, which is
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help
a lot to the
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in their life. They believe that, youth could
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make
their life
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start
knowing about historical story like how in eighteen for nineteen century
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people
did struggle youth would be
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motivation from it, even they would never give up to their life those
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who have motivated from
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stories.

In conclusion
, does not matter what
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ought to take
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. Its matter what
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would like to learn about which
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,
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history
or
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and
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science
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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