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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subject like Science and Technology are more important that History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.47

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subject like Science and Technology are more important that History. v. 47
The education in schools has taken the important role in social. There are some arguments that history subject is the most important, whereas some people realize of the science and technology. In my view, every student should learn both of them because there are both valid points which I will explain in this essay. On the one hand, knowing history is valuable for people to know the civilization. Firstly, learning from previous major events can be the lessons for new generations. Secondly, it is the symbol of nationalism and dignity. Finally, history can connect between the past and the present such as culture, language, tradition and so on. Thus, we can learn technology and science from the past and continue making it better in the future. On the other hand, It can be seen that, nowadays, we live in the digital and innovation era. Science and technology has taken the important part of the world revolution. Therefore, studying in this major is the key to remaining on cutting-edge machinery. For example, a phone has been developed from landline to smartphone, a computer has been emerged to the laptop which is thinner and lighter. However, studying this should learn base from the past which can inspire to improve the better experiments and running the world forward to the future. In conclusion, there are significant points to study history in schools, especially the connecting between the past and the present. Same as the importance of science and technology subject which can move the world forward to be the greater world.
The education in schools has taken the
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important
role in social. There are
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some
arguments that
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history
subject is the most
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important
, whereas
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some
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people
realize of the
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science
and
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technology
. In my view, every student should learn both of them
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because
there are both valid points which I will
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explain
in this essay.

On the one hand, knowing
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history
is valuable for
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people
to know the civilization.
Firstly
, learning from previous major
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events
can be the lessons for new generations.
Secondly
, it is the symbol of nationalism and dignity.
Finally
,
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history
can connect between the
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past
and the present such as culture, language, tradition and
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so
on.
Thus
, we can learn
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technology
and
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science
from the
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past
and continue making it better in the future.

On the other hand
, It can be
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seen
that, nowadays, we
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live
in the digital and innovation era.
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Science
and
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technology
has taken the
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important
part of the
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world
revolution.
Therefore
, studying in this major is the key to remaining on cutting-edge machinery.
For example
, a phone has
been developed
from landline to smartphone, a computer has
been emerged
to the laptop which is thinner and lighter.
However
, studying this should learn base from the
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past
which can inspire to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the better experiments and running the
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world
forward to the future.

In conclusion
, there are significant points to study
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history
in schools,
especially
the connecting between the
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past
and the present. Same as the importance of
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science
and
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technology
subject which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
the
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world
forward to be the greater
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world
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subject like Science and Technology are more important that History. v. 47

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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