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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.42

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. v. 42
There are some arguments that History is the primary subject in school. However, others believe that Science and Technology are the most important subjects in these days. From my perspective, Science and Technology are more crucial subject than History. In this essay, I will examine both points of view carefully. It is true that History is a critical subject as an academic study. First and foremost, studying history would be the fundamental base of society because people are able to see the paths of the countries. It is also very important for each of us to know how the society was like a long time ago and how the nation developed as a member of the society. Moreover, it can be said that people have an obligation to learn about the disaster which human provoked such as the World War II. People should learn from those historical mistakes and be advised not to repeat the catastrophe again. On the other hand, I believe that subject like Science and Technology have more advantages to study. For one thing, the development of technology is necessary for human being’s prosperity. Human society has been developed through many evolutions which were enabled by new technologies such as industrial and IT evolution. These developments made people lives safer, healthier and more convenient. Secondly, new technology would advance further research of history. Take the field of archaeology for example. Discovering an old remnant are a difficult issue, however, the latest technology such as computer scanning would help the research to propel. As a result, the study of history would progress and the society can gain more historical truths. In conclusion, although learning History in the school is essential, I believe that the study of Science and Technology have much more benefits to students and society.
There are
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some
arguments that
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History
is the primary
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subject
in school.
However
, others believe that
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Science
and
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Technology
are the most
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important
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subjects
in these days. From my perspective,
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Science
and
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Technology
are more crucial
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subject
than
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History
. In this essay, I will examine both points of view
carefully
.

It is true that
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History
is a critical
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subject
as an academic
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study
.
First
and foremost, studying
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history
would be the fundamental base of
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society
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because
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people
are able to
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see
the paths of the countries. It is
also
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very
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important
for each of us to know how the
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society
was like a long time ago and how the nation developed as a member of the
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society
.
Moreover
, it can
be said
that
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people
have an obligation to learn about the disaster which human provoked such as the World War II.
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People
should learn from those historical mistakes and
be advised
not to repeat the catastrophe again.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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subject
like
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Science
and
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Technology
have more advantages to
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study
. For one thing, the development of
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technology
is necessary for human being’s prosperity. Human
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society
has
been developed
through
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many
evolutions which
were enabled
by new
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technologies
such as industrial and IT evolution. These developments made
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people
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lives
safer, healthier and more convenient.
Secondly
, new
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technology
would advance
further
research of
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history
. Take the field of archaeology
for example
. Discovering an
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old
remnant are a difficult issue,
however
, the latest
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technology
such as computer scanning would
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help
the research to propel.
As a result
, the
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study
of
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history
would progress and the
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society
can gain more historical truths.

In conclusion
, although learning
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History
in the school is essential, I believe that the
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study
of
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Science
and
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Technology
have much more benefits to students and
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society
.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. v. 42

Essay
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4 paragraphs
299 words
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