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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.40

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. v. 40
Every person has a different view about the crucial school subjects. While some people give more emphasis to the History subject, I strongly believe that Science and Technology subjects hold higher importance than History in this contemporary world. On the one hand, those whose believes History is most vital subject might argue that it is crucial for everyone to know the past events. This is because it can help in deeply understanding the present circumstances, and can also aptly interpret our future. For instance, we know that 'purdah system' prevails in some parts of India because the history tells us that this custom was brought by that Mughal dynasty from Persia during their invasion to India. If we stop giving such significance to this subject, we will not only be unable to understand many current followed traditions, but will also not value them. On the other hand, I think that the cognitive subjects such as Science and Technology are more indispensable because they give practical knowledge about the working phenomenon of the world. For example, Science helps us understand the theories behind the significant earth's activities such as gravitational pull, working of a food chain and the water cycle. Additionally, they also improve the probability of bagging a future job as more opportunities are present in this genre. If less importance is given to such subjects, children will be kept unknown from a major chunk of knowledge, which can also reduce the job options for them. In conclusion, despite some people's believe that history is the most important subject because it helps to understand past, present and future, I firmly believe that Science is more important because it gives better job opportunities and understand various natural phenomena.
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people
give more emphasis to the
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History
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believe
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Science
and Technology
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subjects
hold higher importance than
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History
in this contemporary world.

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believes
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History
is most vital
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subject
might argue that it is crucial for everyone to know the past
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events
. This is
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because
it can
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help
in
deeply
understanding the present circumstances, and can
also
aptly
interpret our future.
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, we know that 'purdah system' prevails in
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some
parts of India
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because
the
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history
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tells
us that this custom
was brought
by that Mughal dynasty from Persia during their invasion to India. If we
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stop
giving such significance to this
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understand
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current
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Science
and Technology are more indispensable
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because
they give practical knowledge about the working phenomenon of the world.
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,
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Science
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helps
us
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understand
the theories behind the significant earth's activities such as gravitational pull, working of a food chain and the water cycle.
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, they
also
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improve
the probability of bagging a future job as more opportunities are present in this genre. If less importance is
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given
to such
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subjects
, children will be
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kept
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reduce
the job options for them.

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believe
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that
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is more
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important
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because
it gives better job opportunities and
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understand
various natural phenomena.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. v. 40

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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