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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both this views and give your own opinion. v.38

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. v. 38
In today’s schools, history, science and technology courses are compulsory for students. People hold different ideas about which subject is more important for society today, with some saying that history is one of the most vital units while others say science and technology subjects are more crucial. Personally, I believe both history and science and technology are equally critical. On the one hand, history is an indispensable subject for any independent person and country. In addition to the students that major in history, a technical guy also needs to learn the history of his field. This period, revealing the development of technology can be helpful for him to understand more deeply what he is focusing on, rather than a set of equations. For example, the historical evidence supporting quantum physics can help to predict the future of our physical world. As for a country, studying history can give us an idea about what our ancestors did and how they contributed to their countries. By doing so, we can avoid the same disasters that have appeared such as World War Two. On the other hand, there is no denying that science and technology will play an essential role in today’s world. The processing of history always accompanies the promotion of science and technology. A historian usually needs to learn some basic knowledge about science and technology, which can help him or her to know more about the connection between history and science. For instance, without the invention of ironware, our artistic culture would not exist. In addition, science and technology are the first productive forces, which is a famous slogan in China. It means that they are necessary for the development of a nation in terms of what it produces. If the citizens find it hard to fill their stomachs, they would be less likely to learn history stories. In conclusion, history and science and technology courses are all keys to promoting the people and their countries. They should co-exist in the development of today’s world.
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and
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courses are compulsory for students.
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for society
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saying that
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history
is one of the most vital units while others say
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science
and
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subjects are more crucial.
Personally
, I believe both
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history
and
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science
and
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technology
are
equally
critical.

On the one hand,
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history
is an indispensable subject for any independent person and
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country
.
In addition
to the students that major in
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history
, a technical guy
also
needs to learn the
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history
of his field. This period, revealing the development of
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technology
can be helpful for him to understand more
deeply
what he is focusing on,
rather
than a set of equations.
For example
, the historical evidence supporting quantum physics can
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help
to predict the future of our physical
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world
. As for a
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country
, studying
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history
can give us an
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idea
about what our ancestors did and how they contributed to their
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countries
. By doing
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so
, we can avoid the same disasters that have appeared such as
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World
War Two.

On the other hand
, there is no denying that
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science
and
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technology
will play an essential role in
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today’s
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world
. The processing of
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history
always accompanies the promotion of
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science
and
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technology
. A historian
usually
needs to learn
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some
basic knowledge about
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science
and
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technology
, which can
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help
him or her to know more about the
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connection between
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history
and
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science
.
For instance
, without the invention of ironware, our artistic culture would not exist.
In addition
,
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science
and
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technology
are the
first
productive forces, which is a
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famous
slogan in China. It means that they are necessary for the development of a nation in terms of what it produces. If the citizens find it
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hard
to fill their stomachs, they would be less likely to learn
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history
stories.

In conclusion
,
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history
and
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science
and
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technology
courses are all keys to promoting the
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people
and their
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countries
. They should co-exist in the development of
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today’s
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world
.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. v. 38

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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