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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.31

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. v. 31
It is often argued about the importance of each subject taught at school. Some believed that history holds more significance over science and technology, whereas some might disagree with that statement. I think that equipping future generations with knowledge of science and technology is more crucial for facing the future. On one hand, learning history is deemed necessary by most people because of the values that we find within it. After studying about the past, future generations could take into account their predecessors' mistakes and use them as a way to improve their future. Furthermore, recorded histories have been proven beneficial as most of the new technology is invented because of said histories. Inventors realized the hardships that humanity had to go through, and they used it as a motivation to make the world a better place by inventing numerous devices. For example, Thomas Edison invented the light bulb with the intention of better lighting to help him study and read books. On the other hand, technological advancement and globalization have made it hard for future generations to survive without sheer knowledge regarding those subjects. Moreover, an expert stated that we must educate ourselves alongside the developments of technology as these developments will continue to happen despite our conditions. Hence, the faster we adapt to technology, the higher chance of success we will have. To illustrate, students who experienced early exposure to technology are said to have a better thought process and cognitive skills, resulting in a noticeably better score achievement than others, despite their socioeconomic situation. I believe that science and technology are far more critical in the future than that of history for numerous reasons, such as the continuous improvement and development of the modern-day times. However, it does not necessarily mean that we should omit history all-together. In conclusion, both subjects have their positive aspects of the future. Studying science and technology will result in better opportunities to succeed and survive in the future, whereas studying history will teach us valuable lessons and possibly prevent past mistakes ever happening again.
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history
holds more significance over
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science
and
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technology
, whereas
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some
might disagree with that statement. I
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think
that equipping
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future
generations with knowledge of
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science
and
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technology
is more crucial for facing the future.

On one hand, learning
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history
is deemed
necessary by most
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people
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because
of the values that we find within it. After studying about the past,
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future
generations could take into account their predecessors' mistakes and
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use
them as a way to
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improve
their
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future
.
Furthermore
, recorded
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histories
have
been proven
beneficial as most of the new
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technology
is invented
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because
of said
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histories
. Inventors realized the hardships that humanity had to go through, and they
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used
it as a motivation to
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make
the world a
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better
place by inventing numerous devices.
For example
, Thomas Edison invented the light bulb with the intention of
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better
lighting to
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help
him study and read books.

On the other hand
, technological advancement and globalization have made it
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hard
for
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future
generations to survive without sheer knowledge regarding those subjects.
Moreover
, an expert stated that we
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must
educate ourselves alongside the developments of
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technology
as these developments will continue to happen despite our conditions.
Hence
, the faster we adapt to
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technology
, the higher chance of success we will have. To illustrate, students who experienced early exposure to
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technology
are said
to have a
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better
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thought
process and cognitive
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skills
, resulting in a
noticeably
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better
score achievement than others, despite their socioeconomic situation.

I believe that
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science
and
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technology
are far more critical in the
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future
than that of
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history
for numerous reasons, such as the continuous improvement and development of the modern-day times.
However
, it does not
necessarily
mean that we should omit
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history
all-together.

In conclusion
, both subjects have their
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positive
aspects of the
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future
. Studying
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science
and
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technology
will result in
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better
opportunities to succeed and survive in the
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future
, whereas studying
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history
will teach us valuable lessons and
possibly
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prevent
past mistakes ever happening again.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. v. 31

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
7.5
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