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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinionGive reasons for your answe v.24

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. 24
In recent times, an exchange of information or ideas is often seen with suspicion. A section of society believes that, brainstorming the required information will lead to a collective development of their society or nation. However, there are others who perceive that nothing comes for free and red lines to be drawn before sharing the details of certain innovations. This essay will cover both these views with my opinion inclined towards the latter. On the one hand, there is a known belief that sharing is caring. There were several societies whose infrastructures were uplifted just because of sharing their innovation and their research. For example, the Greek and Roman civilizations have contributed their wealthy modes of trade, health care and learning alphabets to the entire planet by which our ancestors benefited right from using coins till exploring trade through sea-route. None have complained about any intellectual theft nor any innovation crisis. On the other hand, nothing can be taken for granted. That’s the reason, there are so many controls placed from arms embargo, space research, fighter jets and nuclear proliferation. For example, if there were no such controls to these niche technologies, it could be captured by anyone who could sound a death knell to the entire human race on earth. We have already suffered a nuclear disaster in Japan and none can afford to see another apocalypse. For that reason, innovations have to be protected and copyrights were issued. To recapitulate, sharing is certainly a boon to the well-being of humans. Although, it serves a purpose in sharing business and academic researches, not all can be shared as it would cause a pandemonium among various countries. This would lead to an unhealthy technology race and could trigger a war to show who dominates the world. Therefore, certain core ideas and innovations always have to be protected to deliver its purpose, else an Armageddon is waiting in our next door.
In recent times, an exchange of information or
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ideas
is
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often
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seen
with suspicion. A section of society believes that, brainstorming the required information will lead to a collective development of their society or nation.
However
, there are others who perceive that nothing
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comes
for free and red lines to
be drawn
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before
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sharing
the
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details
of certain
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innovations
. This essay will cover both these views with my opinion inclined towards the latter.

On the one hand, there is a known belief that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sharing
is caring. There were several societies whose infrastructures
were uplifted
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just
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
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sharing
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
innovation
and their research.
For example
, the Greek and Roman civilizations have contributed their wealthy modes of trade, health care and learning alphabets to the entire planet by which our ancestors benefited right from using coins till exploring trade through sea-route. None have complained about any intellectual theft nor any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
innovation
crisis.

On the other hand
, nothing can
be taken
for granted. That’s the reason, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
controls placed from arms embargo, space research, fighter jets and nuclear proliferation.
For example
, if there were no such controls to these niche technologies, it could
be captured
by anyone who could sound a death knell to the entire human race on earth. We have already suffered a nuclear disaster in Japan and none can afford to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
another apocalypse. For that reason,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
innovations
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be protected
and copyrights
were issued
.

To recapitulate,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sharing
is
certainly
a boon to the well-being of humans. Although, it serves a purpose in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sharing
business and academic researches, not all can
be shared
as it would cause a pandemonium among various countries. This would lead to an unhealthy technology race and could trigger a war to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
who dominates the world.
Therefore
, certain core
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ideas
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
innovations
always
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be protected
to deliver its purpose, else an Armageddon is waiting in our
next
door.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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