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Happiness is considered very important in life, why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness. Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own knowledge and experiences. v.1

Happiness is considered very important in life, why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness. v. 1
It is widely believed that a state of happiness is a crucial one in life. However, it has been a difficult task to ascribe a particular meaning to describe it. In this essay I will be discussing the reason for this and factors necessary to be put in place to attain a state of happiness with relevant illustrations. Generally, happiness is a state of emotional excitement as a result of self actualization and satisfaction of a particular need per time. There are several reasons why it is difficult to define this in specificity. To start with, the meaning of happiness varies per person. Hence, it is individualized. This is because we all have a different need and whatever brings satisfaction and fulfilment to a person defines his own happiness. For example, at a point, passing my final year exam was all I needed to be happy, meanwhile my friend needed to have a successful marriage to be happy. Achieving this needs defined our individual happiness at that point. In addition, happiness is time defined because needs changes per time. sometimes an individual's need might be a house, when achieved it can change to money. Therefore achievement of the timely needs is what brings happiness because that is relevant to the moment. Looking into factors needed to be established to be happy in life, the first thing is goal setting. An individual must be able to define the need of the hour that will bring him desired joy. This will assist in making relevant plans. To illustrate, I discovered even though I have a lot of abilities, I can only derive joy in being a Nurse. I then made plans, asked questions and worked with people in the field. Goal setting helped me to concentrate my energy on this and I achieved it. The second factor which is determination means working against all odds. This particular factor will be the drive in times of challenges. In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is time defined and individualised. Also goal setting and determination are two key factors to be happy in life.
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widely
believed that a state of
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happiness
is a crucial one in life.
However
, it has been a difficult task to ascribe a particular meaning to
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describe
it. In this essay I will be discussing the reason for this and
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factors
necessary to
be put
in place to attain a state of
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happiness
with relevant illustrations.

Generally
,
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happiness
is a state of emotional excitement
as a result
of self actualization and satisfaction of a particular
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need
per
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time
. There are several reasons why it is difficult to
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define
this in specificity. To
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start
with, the meaning of
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happiness
varies per person.
Hence
, it
is individualized
. This is
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because
we all have a
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different
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need
and whatever brings satisfaction and
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fulfilment
to a person
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defines
his
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own
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happiness
.
For example
, at a point, passing my final year exam was all I needed to be
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happy
, meanwhile my friend needed to have a successful marriage to be
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happy
. Achieving this
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needs
defined our individual
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happiness
at that point.

In addition
,
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happiness
is
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time
defined
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because
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needs
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changes
per
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time
.
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sometimes
an individual's
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need
might be a
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house
, when achieved it can
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change
to money.
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Therefore
achievement of the timely
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needs
is what brings
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happiness
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because
that is
relevant to the moment.

Looking into
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factors
needed to
be established
to be
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happy
in life, the
first
thing is goal setting. An individual
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must
be able to
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define
the
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need
of the hour that will bring him desired joy. This will assist in making relevant plans. To illustrate, I discovered
even though
I have
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a lot of
abilities, I can
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only
derive joy in being a Nurse. I then made plans, asked questions and worked with
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people
in the field. Goal setting
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helped
me to concentrate my energy on this and I achieved it. The second
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factor
which is determination means working against all odds. This particular
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factor
will be the drive in
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times
of challenges.

In conclusion
,
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happiness
is difficult to
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define
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because
it is
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time
defined and
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individualised
.
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Also
goal setting and determination are two key
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factors
to be
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happy
in life.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life, why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
352 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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