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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v.3

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 3
Everybody desires to be happy in life and interestingly the requirements to be cheerful vary from person to person. This is the main reason why defining happiness is not that easy. However, there are some common things that are regarded important to be delighted in life. Defining happiness is quite challenging because the requirements to achieve it is not fixed. While someone dreams that his economic freedom would make him happy, a very rich man dreams about having a caring family to be happy. Similarly, a couple who do not have any child think about having a baby all the time and would be ready to do anything for that. On the contrary, many poor families, mostly in poor countries, find more children to be their burden. The practical world is quite puzzling and the humankind wants more than they have. When a person’s aim or expectation is fulfilled, he wants more and this is a never ending process. This is why happiness is not a simple word that we can describe with a neat and precise definition. However, there are some vital factors that are commonly regarded as the main ingredients to be happy in life. First of all, physical and psychological soundness is very important to be happy and people can truly realise that when they get sick. Economic freedom - ability to fulfil the needs in life, is the second most important factor to be happy, in my opinion. It is often said that being happy with an empty stomach is not possible. Thirdly, having a happy family where members love each other and care for them is considered important to be in peace in life. It is usually rare to find a happy person who does not have a pleasant family. Individual freedom is also considered a great influence to be happy in life. Someone without personal freedom cannot feel the happiness. Most importantly, being contented in life is the key to being happy. If someone can be contented with whatever little he has, he will be happy in life. In conclusion, though there is no easy and precise definition of happiness, common attributes like sound health, caring family, freedom and personal contentment are regarded to be key ingredients to be happy in life.
Everybody desires to be
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happy
in
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life
and
interestingly
the requirements to be cheerful vary from
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person
to
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person
. This is the main reason why defining
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happiness
is not that easy.
However
, there are
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some
common things that
are regarded
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important
to
be delighted
in life.

Defining
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happiness
is quite challenging
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because
the requirements to achieve it is not
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fixed
. While someone dreams that his economic
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freedom
would
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make
him
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happy
, a
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very
rich
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man
dreams about having a caring
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family
to be
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happy
.
Similarly
, a couple who do not have any child
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think
about having a baby all the time and would be ready to do anything for that.
On the contrary
,
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many
poor
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families
,
mostly
in poor countries, find more children to be their burden. The practical world is quite puzzling and the humankind wants more than they have. When a
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person’s
aim or expectation
is fulfilled
, he wants more and this is a never ending process. This is why
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happiness
is not a simple word that we can
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describe
with a neat and precise definition.

However
, there are
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some
vital factors that are
commonly
regarded as the main ingredients to be
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happy
in
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life
.
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First of all
, physical and psychological soundness is
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very
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important
to be
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happy
and
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people
can
truly
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realise
that when they
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get
sick. Economic
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freedom
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-
ability to fulfil the needs in
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life
, is the second most
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important
factor to be
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happy
, in my opinion. It is
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often
said that being
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happy
with an empty stomach is not possible.
Thirdly
, having a
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happy
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family
where members
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love
each other and care for them
is considered
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important
to be in peace in
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life
. It is
usually
rare to find a
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happy
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person
who does not have a pleasant
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family
. Individual
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freedom
is
also
considered a great influence to be
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happy
in
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life
. Someone without personal
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freedom
cannot feel the
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happiness
. Most
importantly
,
being contented
in
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life
is the key to being
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happy
. If someone can
be contented
with whatever
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little
he has, he will be
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happy
in life.

In conclusion
, though there is no easy and precise definition of
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happiness
, common attributes like sound health, caring
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family
,
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freedom
and personal contentment
are regarded
to be key ingredients to be
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happy
in
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life
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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