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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v.29

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 29
Life cannot be imagined without happiness. However, there are some debates about what elements are linked in reaching felicity and why it is hard to describe it. In this essay, relating descriptions will be examined further. To begin with, happiness is an abstract object that infeasible to formulate with particular words as it is regarded in different ways by humanity. Some types of people consider wealth is enough to be happy, whereas others link it with health and family. Hence, it is complicated task to define it with only one word. Firstly, one of the feasible necessities in achieving felicity is having good fortune. In fact, this abstract constituent is vitally weighty for everybody in order to succeed, regardless of the unbelievers in this abstraction. Particularly, it is believed that luck reflects one of the forms of happiness. Secondly, the second factor in favor of happiness is struggle. It cannot be denied that every target requires more incentives, attempt and striving. Therefore, as long as whoever has aim to become happy individual, it is necessary to make an effort. Last but not least, happiness is considered for some types of people that being healthy and having favorite occupation is sufficient to be happy. It is not substantial to possess bulk source of money or numerous houses and cars. The essential thing is how human being would span their lifetime significantly. Having investigated the arguments, it appears to me that there is no special definition for happiness, however it seems to be associated some feasible components, including, having luck, satisfied occupation and striving to achieve bliss.
Life cannot
be imagined
without
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happiness
.
However
, there are
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some
debates about what elements
are linked
in reaching felicity and why it is
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hard
to
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describe
it. In this essay, relating descriptions will
be examined
further
.

To
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begin
with,
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happiness
is an abstract object that infeasible to formulate with particular words as it
is regarded
in
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different
ways by humanity.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
types of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
consider wealth is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to be happy, whereas others link it with health and family.
Hence
, it
is complicated
task to define it with
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only
one word.
Firstly
, one of the feasible necessities in achieving felicity is having
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
fortune. In fact, this abstract constituent is
vitally
weighty for everybody in order to succeed, regardless of the unbelievers in this abstraction.
Particularly
, it
is believed
that luck reflects one of the forms of happiness.

Secondly
, the second factor in favor of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
is struggle. It cannot
be denied
that every target requires more incentives, attempt and striving.
Therefore
, as long as whoever has aim to become happy individual, it is necessary to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an effort.

Last
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but
not least,
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happiness
is considered
for
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some
types of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
that being healthy and having favorite occupation is sufficient to be happy. It is not substantial to possess bulk source of money or numerous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
and cars. The essential thing is how human being would
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span
their lifetime
significantly
.

Having investigated the arguments, it appears to me that there is no special definition for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
,
however
it seems to
be associated
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
feasible components, including, having luck, satisfied occupation and striving to achieve bliss.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 29

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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