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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define*. What factors are important in achieving happiness. ? v.18

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define*. What factors are important in achieving happiness. ? v. 18
In the era of hectic schedule, almost everyone wants to be happy. However, it is very difficult to describe the definition of happiness, because it depends upon everyone's personal choices. This essay will discuss that why it is difficult to define the enjoyment due to the individual's selection, including the factors which are important to get pleasure like - basic needs of living as well as sharing the experiences with others. To begin with, to set the definition of joys is very tough, because of the different choices of everyone. Some people like to be happy in small bites and others do not understand that. Sometimes, a person does not understand the feelings of another, because one can assume the level of joy, of another one, but he/she will not get the actual idea. For example, if an average student gets 70% in exams, then it will be a very special moment for that, but it might not be a big achievement for an extremely intelligent student. So, just because of that reason, happiness cannot be described. Moreover, there some factors which play a vital role in order to get the joy. These factors are including the fulfilment of all basic needs and to have someone to share the experiences. For instance, if someone does not have a safe place to live, proper and healthy food to eat, and clothes to wear, then it will affect the happiness of that person. Also, if a person is living lonely, he/she will feel isolated all the time and if someone has a family, friends and relatives for discussion, then he/she will achieve the prosperity. These factors could influence the way of achieving joys. To conclude, life is incomplete without joy. This essay discussed the main reason for deciding the definition of pleasure, with the two factors for the enjoyment which are - having basic needs and share experiences with somebody.
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However
, it is
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very
difficult to
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describe
the definition of happiness,
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because
it depends upon everyone's personal choices. This essay will discuss that why it is difficult to define the enjoyment due to the individual's selection, including the
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factors
which are
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important
to
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get
pleasure like
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basic needs of living
as well
as sharing the experiences with others.

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joys
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people
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, a person does not understand the feelings of another,
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joy
, of another one,
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idea
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gets
70% in exams, then it will be a
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special moment for that,
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it might not be a
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achievement for an
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of that reason, happiness cannot be
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.

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, there
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factors
which play a vital role in order to
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get
the
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joy
. These
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factors
are including the
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fulfilment
of all basic needs and to have someone to share the experiences.
For instance
, if someone does not have a safe place to
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live
, proper and healthy food to eat, and clothes to wear, then it will affect the happiness of that person.
Also
, if a person is living lonely, he/she will feel isolated all the time and if someone has a family, friends and relatives for discussion, then he/she will achieve the prosperity. These
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factors
could influence the way of achieving joys.

To conclude
, life is incomplete without
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joy
. This essay discussed the main reason for deciding the definition of pleasure, with the two
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factors
for the enjoyment which are
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
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having basic needs and share experiences with somebody.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define*. What factors are important in achieving happiness. ? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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