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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v.17

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 17
Introduction: It is known for centuries that we cannot live a life without being happy, nonetheless, defining this is still a challenging task for mankind. Therefore, this essay will discuss the causes of the inability to explain this feeling and what are the essential factors of being happy. Firstly, the feeling of being happy cannot be described because it is subjective. Explaining this, everyone has his or her own standard of happiness and it cannot be understood by others. For example, someone’ s happiness might be having a lot of money while another may define happiness as being famous. Another reason is the unclear definition of feeling happy. A conspicuous case-in-point is that, to somebody, it can be peacefulness whereas for someone else it can be defined as joy. Thus, it can be said that the term cannot be defined because it is seen differently by everyone and no one feel the same “happiness” as the others. On the flip side, however, we can still define the factors required for being happy. Primarily, it is the provision of the basic needs, including water, food and a shelter. This is obvious as these are the elements that mainly contribute to the survival of a person, lacking any of these will not be in a good state of mind and thus cannot be happy. Secondly, it is the connection with people around us. We cannot feel happy if there is no one to interact with or share our emotions with. For instance, a person with little or no friend will hardly experience joy in his life. While there are many other requirements for being happy, these are the most significant ones. Conclusion: In summary, while happiness is almost impossible to be explained as it varies between people, the provision of the basic needs and relationships will help us experience this feeling.
Introduction: It
is known
for centuries that we cannot
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live
a life without being
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happy
, nonetheless, defining this is
still
a challenging task for mankind.
Therefore
, this essay will discuss the causes of the inability to
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explain
this
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feeling
and what are the essential factors of being happy.

Firstly
, the
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feeling
of being
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happy
cannot be
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described
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because
it is subjective. Explaining this, everyone has
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his or her
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own
standard of
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happiness
and it cannot
be understood
by others.
For example
, someone’ s
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happiness
might be having
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a lot of
money while another may define
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happiness
as being
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famous
. Another reason is the unclear definition of
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feeling
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happy
. A conspicuous case-in-point is that, to somebody, it can be peacefulness whereas for someone else it can
be defined
as joy.
Thus
, it can
be said
that the term cannot
be defined
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because
it is
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seen
differently
by everyone and no one feel the same
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“happiness”
as the others.

On the flip side,
however
, we can
still
define the factors required for being
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happy
.
Primarily
, it is the provision of the basic needs, including water, food and a shelter. This is obvious as these are the elements that
mainly
contribute to the survival of a person, lacking any of these will not be in a
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good
state of mind and
thus
cannot be
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happy
.
Secondly
, it is the connection with
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people
around us. We cannot feel
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happy
if there is no one to interact with or share our emotions with.
For instance
, a person with
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little
or no friend will hardly experience joy in his life. While there are
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many
other requirements for being
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happy
, these are the most significant ones.

Conclusion: In summary, while
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happiness
is almost impossible to be
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explained
as it varies between
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people
, the provision of the basic needs and relationships will
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help
us experience this
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feeling
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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