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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v.16

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 16
In this ever-changing world, it is no doubt that people want to pursue and make an effort by all means to achieve joy. Nobody, however, can fully understand the definition of jubilation. This essay is going to discuss why it is unfeasible to depict happiness and factors for bliss achievement. To begin with, glee is hard to describe on the grounds that it varies from person to person. Everybody has different backgrounds and anatomical differences, so basic needs change according to each individual man. That explains why people have various methods in order to live up to their expectations and have their own definition about happiness. Persons, for example, who are money-driven feel pleased when they are in the middle of tasks in order to generate more income. The disabled, moreover, are satisfied when they are not a burden to society and can create new values to contribute to the community which they are living in. Therefore, we do not have a clear depiction about delight, so grasping fully this abstract concept is really difficult. Although it is nearly impossible to define what is called enjoyment, a wide range of people agree that there are a variety of factors to achieve it. However, the most prominent factors are maintaining a positive outlook on life and work. When it comes to life, we should appreciate small pleasures. A case in point is that watching videos about poor living conditions of children in the slums of the Philippines, we will realize how lucky and happy we are because we have food on a daily basis. In terms of job, some people are under a lot of pressures, so learning how to manage workloads and thinking positively are imperative keys to fulfil job requirements. Accordingly, staying positive at work can help us work productively, do not struggle and feel happier when we deal with assignments. To sum up, giving a precise definition of contentment is not easy, but if we relish new challenges and endeavour to keep an optimistic mood, we can lead a fulfilled life.
In this ever-changing world, it is no doubt that
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people
want to pursue and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an effort by all means to achieve joy. Nobody,
however
, can
fully
understand the definition of jubilation. This essay is going to discuss why it is unfeasible to depict happiness and factors for bliss achievement.

To
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begin
with, glee is
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hard
to
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describe
on the grounds that it varies from person to person. Everybody has
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different
backgrounds and anatomical differences,
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so
basic needs
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change
according to each individual
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man
. That
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explains
why
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people
have various methods in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
up to their expectations and have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
definition about happiness. Persons,
for example
, who are money-driven feel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
when they are in the middle of tasks in order to generate more income. The disabled,
moreover
,
are satisfied
when they are not a burden to society and can create new values to contribute to the community which they are living in.
Therefore
, we do not have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
depiction about delight,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
grasping
fully
this abstract concept is
really
difficult.

Although it is
nearly
impossible to define what
is called
enjoyment, a wide range of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that there are a variety of factors to achieve it.
However
, the most prominent factors are maintaining a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
outlook on life and work. When it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to life, we should appreciate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
pleasures. A case in point is that watching videos about poor living conditions of children in the slums of the Philippines, we will realize how lucky and happy we are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we have food on a daily basis. In terms of job,
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some
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people
are under
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
pressures,
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so
learning how to manage workloads and thinking
positively
are imperative keys to fulfil job requirements.
Accordingly
, staying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
at work can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us work
productively
, do not struggle and feel happier when we deal with assignments.

To sum up, giving a precise definition of contentment is not easy,
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but
if we relish new challenges and
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endeavour
to
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keep
an optimistic mood, we can lead a fulfilled life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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