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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v.11

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 11
Prosperity is considered most valuable in growth. This essay will discuss the reason of the difficulty in defining contentment and it will analyse the factors which are significant in accomplishing glee. With regard to the question of complexity to describe joy, I think it is because of different perceptions of the individual. Each and every individual differ in nature and pleasure depends on their lifestyle and taste. For instance, among many students in a classroom one may be happy for securing the top rank in class while another scholar finds euphoria in holding the first position in racing. Similarly, a rich human may find bliss in the success of their business, meanwhile the peer one may get happy for getting good food. The most crucial factor in attaining optimism is sound healthiest. A healthy body leads to a happy soul. To illustrate, a healthy, but poor individual can work hard to achieve his needs and can be happy while a wealthier person with bad health cannot be able to live a happy heart as he won't be able to enjoy and consume everything he has. Likewise, personal gratification is the essential ingredient for peace of mind. If one is satisfied with what they have and ultimately they will be happy. To conclude, exhilaration depends on the individual's way of growth so it is quite tough to define and two significant factors in accomplishing elation are sound health and personal gratification.
Prosperity
is considered
most valuable in growth. This essay will discuss the reason of the difficulty in defining contentment and it will
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analyse
the factors which are significant in accomplishing glee.

With regard to the question of complexity to
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describe
joy, I
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think
it is
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because
of
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different
perceptions of the individual. Each and every individual differ in nature and pleasure depends on their lifestyle and taste.
For instance
, among
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many
students in a classroom one may be
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happy
for securing the top rank in
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class
while another scholar finds euphoria in holding the
first
position in racing.
Similarly
, a rich human may find bliss in the success of their business, meanwhile the peer one may
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get
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happy
for getting
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good
food.

The most crucial factor in attaining optimism is sound healthiest. A healthy body leads to a
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happy
soul. To illustrate, a healthy,
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but
poor individual can work
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hard
to achieve his needs and can be
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happy
while a wealthier person with
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bad
health cannot be able to
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live
a
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happy
heart as he won't be able to enjoy and consume everything he has.
Likewise
, personal gratification is the essential ingredient for peace of mind. If one
is satisfied
with what they have and
ultimately
they will be happy.

To conclude
, exhilaration depends on the individual's way of growth
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so
it is quite tough to define and two significant factors in accomplishing elation are sound health and personal gratification.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
240 words
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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