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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v.1

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 1
In today’s society, it is widely acknowledged that the contentment has had a direct impact on people’s life. However, some people do not even think about bringing gladness. This essay will explore why the concept of delight is hard to describe and what are the keys element in acquiring elation. Firstly, it seems that the most important cause to the hardly of describing the enjoyment goes back to the kind of view’s about living. Moreover, some people believe that having a plenty worth is the vital role for getting to the euphoria. however, experience has shown that the wealth plays a minor role in this case. Although the wealth to the extent necessary is important, it does not guarantee the exhilaration. In addition, there were many rich people that despite living a prosperous being, they have not had a happy breath. For example, famous person as Robin Williams despite having the worthy and getting multiple awards in acting, was not happy, and finally committed suicide. Thus, the definition of joy is different and makes it difficult to define. Secondly, there are some elements to obtain jubilation. In fact, having the blitheness living based on less expectations from life and the spirit of helping to needy people. Human is a being that has many desires and aspirations in provided one of them would be fulfilled, those tendencies will be more. thus, the person is made unhappy. However, philanthropy activity such as helping to the needy people create inner prosperity and as well as it also makes life more satisfying. In conclusion, having the variety of view’s about living has direct connection to the difficulty of defining well-being. Furthermore, the factors like less expectation of brio and philanthropy activity are obtaining cheerfulness.
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people’s
life.
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,
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some
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people
do not even
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think
about bringing gladness. This essay will explore why the concept of delight is
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hard
to
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describe
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element in acquiring elation.

Firstly
, it seems that the most
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important
cause to the hardly of describing the enjoyment goes back to the kind of view’s about
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living
.
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,
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some
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people
believe that
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having
a
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plenty
worth is the vital role for getting to the euphoria.
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however
, experience has shown that the wealth plays a minor role
in this case
. Although the wealth to the extent necessary is
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important
, it does not guarantee the exhilaration.
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, there were
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many
rich
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people
that despite
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living
a prosperous being, they have not had a happy breath.
For example
,
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famous
person as Robin Williams despite
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having
the worthy and getting multiple awards in acting, was not happy, and
finally
committed suicide.
Thus
, the definition of joy is
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different
and
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makes
it difficult to define.

Secondly
, there are
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some
elements to obtain jubilation. In fact,
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having
the blitheness
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living
based on
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less
expectations from life and the spirit of helping to needy
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people
. Human is a being that has
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many
desires and aspirations in provided one of them would
be fulfilled
, those tendencies will be more.
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thus
, the person
is made
unhappy.
However
, philanthropy activity such as helping to the needy
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people
create inner prosperity and
as well
as it
also
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makes
life more satisfying.

In conclusion
,
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having
the variety of view’s about
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living
has direct connection to the difficulty of defining well-being.
Furthermore
, the factors like less expectation of
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brio
and philanthropy activity are obtaining cheerfulness.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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