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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development
The two map show center of a small town named Islip in the current time and projection for improvement in the future. In general, town in the future will be much more modernized and provided with new facilities to compare with the town in present time, mainly in the north parts of the town. In the current map, there are few amenities and buildings and whole north part of the town is covered by countryside. There is a straight road passing between shops located on both sides through which it is accessible to go to school located in the south west and to park sited in the south east of the town. Many houses are situated between the path directing to school and parking area in the east. Moving on to the second map, town will be circled around by dual carriageway that will have path to the town on the east side of the map. The school will be expanded slightly, whilst the park will be diminished. New housing area will be constructed near the park and shops in the north will be cleared out in order to make room for new buildings such as, bus station, shopping center, car park and new housing area from west to east of the town. The previous site of main road adjacent to the shops will be converted into a pedestrian area in the future.
The two
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center of a
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small
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Islip
in the
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current
time and projection for improvement in the future.

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,
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town
in the future will be much more modernized and provided with
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new
facilities to compare with the
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town
in present time,
mainly
in the north parts of the town.

In the
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current
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map
, there are few amenities and buildings and whole north part of the
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town
is covered
by countryside. There is a straight road passing between shops located on both sides through which it is accessible to go to school located in the
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south west
and to
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park
sited in the
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south east
of the
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town
.
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houses
are situated
between the path directing to school and parking
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area
in the east.

Moving on to the second
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map
,
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town
will
be circled
around by dual carriageway that will have path to the
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town
on the east side of the
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map
. The school will
be expanded
slightly
, whilst the
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park
will
be diminished
.
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New
housing
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area
will
be constructed
near the
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park
and shops in the north will
be cleared
out in order to
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make
room for
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new
buildings such as, bus station, shopping center, car
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park
and
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new
housing
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area
from west to east of the
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town
. The previous site of main road adjacent to the shops will
be converted
into a pedestrian
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area
in the future.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development

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  American English
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233 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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