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The maps below shoe the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. v.2

The maps below shoe the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. v. 2
The maps illustrate the differences between the development plan and the current condition of a town called Islip. Overall, the plan shows that there will be more buildings built and a dual carriageway will be constructed. The first change is the appearance of a two-lane road running around the town center, which makes it easier for transporting in and out the downtown. Then, the main road in the middle of Islip will be replaced with a pedestrian street only. In the center of Islip, the shopping area in the north is planned to be demolished to make way for several constructions namely bus station, shopping center, car park, as well as a noticeable addition of new houses in the most north. Households in the south of the center will be constructed to become larger, which results in the narrow down condition of the only park in Islip. However, the school and houses situated outside the center will remain unchanged.
The maps illustrate the differences between the development plan and the
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current
condition of a town called
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Islip
.

Overall
, the plan
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shows
that there will be more buildings built and a dual carriageway will
be constructed
.

The
first
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change
is the appearance of a two-lane road running around the town center, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it easier for transporting in and out the downtown. Then, the main road in the middle of
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Islip
will
be replaced
with a pedestrian street
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only
. In the center of
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Islip
, the shopping area in the north
is planned
to
be demolished
to
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make
way for several constructions
namely
bus station, shopping center, car park,
as well
as a noticeable addition of new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
in the most north. Households in the south of the center will
be constructed
to become larger, which results in the narrow down condition of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
park in
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Islip
.

However
, the school and
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houses
situated outside the center will remain unchanged.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The maps below shoe the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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