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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. v. 2

The diagram presents West Park Secondary School at three different stages in its development: 1950, 1980 and 2010. As can be seen from the given illustration, the school went through different changes. In 1950, the school was built near the main road and near the school, there was a place for housing. An extensive spot behind the school was fixed for a playground, while the field behind the housing was a farmland. By 1980, the housing area had been knocked down in order to build a science block and a space for car parking. Moreover, a new sports field was established in the exact area where the farmland was and it is right next to the playground. In 2010, the school's main building and the science block were still intact but the car parking area had been extended and it consumed a great portion of the sports field and playground. During the given time, the area around West Park Secondary School has changed. In addition to a new science block, a larger car park has been constructed and extended. Hence, the spot for sports field and playground reduced.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. v.2

The diagram presents West Park Secondary
School
at three
different
stages in its development: 1950, 1980 and 2010. As can be
seen
from the
given
illustration, the
school
went through
different
changes
.

In 1950, the
school
was built
near the main road and near the
school
, there was a place for housing. An extensive spot behind the
school
was
fixed
for a
playground
, while the
field
behind the housing was a farmland. By 1980, the housing
area
had
been knocked
down in order to build a science block and a space for car parking.
Moreover
, a new sports
field
was established
in the exact
area
where the farmland was and it is right
next
to the
playground
. In 2010, the school's main building and the science block were
still
intact
but
the car parking
area
had
been extended
and it consumed a great portion of the sports
field
and
playground
. During the
given
time, the
area
around West Park Secondary
School
has
changed
.
In addition
to a new science block, a larger car park has
been constructed
and extended.
Hence
, the spot for sports
field
and
playground
reduced
.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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