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The below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development
The given map depicts the centre of a small town called Islip at present and a future plan for the development of the town. A typical town centre of a small town is given. The developmental plan might provide better connectivity in future. Overall, At present apart from main road, roads heading to park and school are not connected. Islip will have major changes like new housing in 2 locations and a dual carriageway which will interlink all the housing and other amenities. Currently, In the south school and park are connected by road, whereas two housing in the town remain disconnected from the roads. Like wise in the north countryside has no road facility. In developmental plan, main road will be replaced by pedestrians only region and construction of new bus station, shopping centre, car park, new housing will be happening in the north of the town where country side is located now and dual carriageway which runs around the town centre. With the construction of dual carriageway whole town will be connected from south the school, park, new housing to the north of the town. 021
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map depicts the
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centre
of a
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small
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town
called
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Islip
at present and a future plan for the development of the
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town
. A typical
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town
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centre
of a
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small
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town
is
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given
. The developmental plan might provide better connectivity
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in future
.

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, At present apart from main
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road
,
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roads
heading to
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park
and school are not connected.

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Islip
will have major
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changes
like
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new
housing in 2 locations and a dual carriageway which will interlink all the housing and other amenities.

Currently
, In the south school and
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park
are connected
by
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road
, whereas two housing in the
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town
remain disconnected from the
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roads
. Like wise in the north countryside has no
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road
facility.

In developmental plan, main
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road
will
be replaced
by pedestrians
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only
region and construction of
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new
bus station, shopping
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centre
, car
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park
,
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new
housing will be happening in the north of the
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town
where country side
is located
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now
and dual carriageway which runs around the
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town
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centre
. With the construction of dual carriageway whole
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town
will
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from south the school,
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park
,
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new
housing to the north of the
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town. 021
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IELTS academic The below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
187 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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