Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing both views, but the arguments are not fully developed. The conclusion does not effectively summarize the discussion or present a strong personal opinion.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and lacks variety. There are instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms, which detract from the overall quality.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the ideas are not always logically sequenced, and some transitions between points are weak, leading to a lack of clarity in the argument.
Grammatical Range
There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement and incorrect sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited, with few complex sentences.