Task Achievement
The essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear opinion. It develops ideas well and supports them with relevant examples.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, with some high-band words. However, there are instances of repetition and a lack of idiomatic expressions.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with a logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, and the arguments are well-organized. However, some sentences could be more tightly linked to enhance overall coherence.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, including complex sentences. However, there are minor errors in punctuation and some sentences could be more complex.