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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.6

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 6
Due to the technological advancement and globalization, people nowadays have an opportunity to choose their desired product or service from more than one option. While the debate on whether mankind is facing too many choices is subjective, I will present my views on both sides and share my opinion. There is undoubtedly no argument that the number of options and choices have increased multifold in the last few years. Due to the penetration of internet across the globe, a person living in the far East of the country can order any product not just available in his jurisdiction but from anywhere across the world, thereby giving him a plethora of options. Same goes with services. People now have multiple options to travel from one place to another through various service providers, can choose to have their favorite dish from various restaurants, can watch their favorite movie either in the movie halls or DVDs or simply online through streaming platforms. Thus, one can say that an average consumer is overloaded with options in almost all walks of life. However, there are still certain areas where we do not find the similar establishment. For example, people living in small towns and villages do not find too many service options to choose from. In addition to that, the possibility of having too many choices would not arise if the person is not economically sound. For a low income earner, the choices might still be limited due to their affordability. Furthermore, there are many other instances where even a wealthy individual may not be presented with multiple choices, such as having a drug for certain incurable diseases. In conclusion, I believe that we certainly have an increased number of choices and options to go with but I wouldn’t agree that this surplus exists in all domains and walks of life. There are gaps and economic differences across the globe that still need to be fixed before we can complain about having too many choices.
Due to the technological advancement and globalization,
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people
nowadays have an opportunity to choose their desired product or
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service
from more than one
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option
. While the debate on whether mankind is facing too
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many
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choices
is subjective, I will present my views on both sides and share my opinion.

There is
undoubtedly
no argument that the number of
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options
and
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choices
have increased
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multifold
in the last few years. Due to the penetration of internet across the globe, a person living in the far East of the country can order any product not
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just
available in his jurisdiction
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but
from anywhere across the world, thereby giving him a plethora of
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options
. Same goes with
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services
.
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People
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now
have multiple
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options
to travel from one place to another through various
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service
providers, can choose to have their favorite dish from various restaurants, can
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watch
their favorite movie either in the movie halls or DVDs or
simply
online through streaming platforms.
Thus
, one can say that an average consumer
is overloaded
with
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options
in almost all walks of life.

However
, there are
still
certain areas where we do not find the similar establishment.
For example
,
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people
living in
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small
towns and villages do not find too
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many
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service
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options
to choose from.
In addition
to that, the possibility of having too
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many
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choices
would not arise if the person is not
economically
sound. For a low income earner, the
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choices
might
still
be limited
due to their affordability.
Furthermore
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other instances where even a wealthy individual may not
be presented
with multiple
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choices
, such as having a drug for certain incurable diseases.

In conclusion
, I believe that we
certainly
have an increased number of
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choices
and
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options
to
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go with
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but
I wouldn’t
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agree
that this surplus exists in all domains and walks of life. There are gaps and economic differences across the globe that
still
need to be
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fixed
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before
we can complain about having too
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many
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choices
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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